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Post by Lily on Dec 17, 2011 19:25:11 GMT -5
Keep in mind this is my first story.Silverstar's Story Silverkit looked around the camp,her green eyes shining brightly.She noticed Lakekit heading over to her.Suddenly,Deerwish raced into ThunderClan's camp."Fox!"She yowled then she picked up Lakekit.Silverkit raced into the nursery with Deerwish behind her.Deerwish put Lakekit down and meowed,"Stay in here."Lakekit nodded.When Deerwish left,Silverkit headed towards a hole in the nursery."Silverkit,what are you doing?"Lakekit meowed.Silverkit muttered mousebrain under her breath and clearly meowed,"I'm going to fight the fox"He gasped then meowed "You can't,Silverkit!I won't let you!"
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Post by Mod Socks on Dec 17, 2011 19:43:29 GMT -5
For your first story, it's pretty good.
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Post by Lily on Dec 17, 2011 19:46:11 GMT -5
thanks
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